Tuesday, March 30, 2010

Inquisitions

Breathing in our thoughts

Limbs are intertwining

Exchanging our youths

Heat consuming our flesh

Heartbeats rhythmically align

Serpents unleashing within

Surroundings are distorting

Breathing is the only sound

Living now has a meaning.

1 comment:

Hajra Sheikh said...

I like this one too, but again if you added some stanzaic structure it would be a lot more powerful. But I really like this one. It's very physical and it provokes that sense within the reader.